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Happy Valentines Day...Just Kiss Already

Hello Everyone, I hope you're having a wonderful Valentines Day.  I celebrated with my hubby yesterday.  We enjoyed a nice dinner and good conversation at a local restaurant.  Although I don't need a designated holiday to show my love for him, it is still nice to have an excuse to do so.

On this wonderful occasion for lovers, Steena Holmes and Christina over at Write-Brained are holding a Just Kiss Already Blogfest.   The entry requirements are simple. An author must post an excerpt of a kissing scene from either her own work, or someone elses.  I decided to post one from a piece I completed a couple years ago.  It's a love scene between Spanish Conquistador, Domingo Mendoza and Chel, a young Mayan girl.  In a nutshell, she wants to accompany him to the Americas.  Although Domingo loves her, he has reservations about taking a woman on such a dangerous journey.  Here goes nothing:

Domingo sprang from the bed and blocked Chel's path.  He wanted to resist her beauty, to respect her as a gentleman respects a lady, but he pulled her closer in spite of himself.  Domingo's lips brushed against Chel's full mouth.  Her sweet, warm breath washed over his skin, sending a surge of heat and desire through his loins.  The tip of his tongue wandered over her soft, bidding lips, tentative and soft at first, then the urgence of his need gave way to desire as his mouth found hers completely.  The young beauty moaned under his embrace. 

Well, that's all folks.  I hate writing love scenes.  Yeah, I know, it's cheesy and needs work.  I'd be interested to know what could improve it.  Thank goodness there aren't too many in my book.  I'm off to see what others have done.  If you get the chance stop over at Steena's or Christines and show your support. Until next time, Happy Writing.
    

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  1. Awesome scene. I'm your newest follower.
    bethfred.com

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  2. I liked this!I like that he's worried about being a gentleman but the desire wins out. Good stuff!

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  3. Welcome Beth and thanks for stopping in to take a gander at my submission. I look forward to getting to know you better in the future.

    Hi Katie, glad you liked it. I hate writing romance. It's hard to keep it real. Anyway, thanks for stopping in. I look forward to getting to know you better.

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  4. lol Short and sweet. You did well for someone who hates writing them. =D

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  5. You hate writing love scenes? It definitely didn't show in this except! I have a feeling Domingo's going to forced to take Chel whether his gentleman impulse likes it or not! :)

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  6. Resistance is futile? Neither of them were trying very hard ;) A sweet and yielding kiss.

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  7. I agree with Jenn's comment! I say nice work and way to capture the passion in one paragraph.

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  8. This is great! I can't believe you captured so much in one paragraph!

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  9. Oh, I don't think this is cheesy at all! I fretted and worried about my kissing scenes for a long time, but I'm getting more confident with them. You've got just enough lips and tongues going here to heat up the scene without getting sloppy! Keep it up!

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  10. I don't know, you were doing pretty good with the way you were going. Could have fooled me that you don't like writing love scenes!

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  11. That was cool from the masculine perspective. Loved the scene!
    Edge of Your Seat Romance

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  12. Thanks to everyone who stopped in and checked out my Valentine's excerpts yesterday. I appreciate the kind words more than you know.

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